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Warmup sketches from stream + Merp's design sketch
Magmalocke Page 6 (Warmup Sketches) by Sir-Herp Etherpley Sketch by Sir-Herp Not Wally by Sir-Herp  

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I stared at four dogs and several chickens and ducks recently. Now, my canine Pokémon and Skarmory don't look as bad. Llama Emoji 34 (Sexy Smile) [V2] by Jerikuto

I've been so ridiculously excited about this page the past two days; I'm really getting attached to my characters, haha. I'm fairly happy with how this page turned out. Hope you enjoy it, too! :la:

:star: Please give me feedback about this page! :star:

I've settled (more or less) on the style I want to draw the rest of the comic in, but I want to know what you, the readers, think! If, say, the backgrounds are getting too distractingly detailed/colorful, I can tone them down. Or if the pages're getting too long and you'd rather have shorter, potentially more frequent updates, I can do that, too. Just tell me! :D
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StrategistColonel Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I see things are getting kinda serious, but on the other hand...
Your character's name is Herp...
Fascher Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2014   Digital Artist
I love this~~ Art style is totally awesome (as the backgrounds as they just add charm) but yeah maybe the text needs to be a tad less... complex? I'm a pretty fast reader so going back through the second time I realised I skipped over some text. The colour coding helps a ton though. I like how your pages are exciting to read :)
TheNuzlockeDuo Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
:bulletpurple: The perspective in that first panel made me squeal. The text is a biiiit confusing to read at points, it gets a little "all over the place", but other than that, this is an excellent page. I love your style - the Skarmory attack and the battle itself was so fun to look at, very well-drawn. One of the best looking pages so far 
Sir-Herp Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2014  Student General Artist
Seriously, thanks man! Your comments made my day. ;ゥ;

I wish I'd used references for that first panel in particular; it didn't turn out as good as I'd imagined. But I'm glad you enjoyed it, nonetheless! And yes, I'm fully aware of how confusing the text bubbles are. I'd intended this (side conversations and whatnot) but the execution could have been better. This battle is my favorite thing that I've drawn! 'Twas a blast. :D

It's been a long time since I was able to make a Magmalocke page, but I'll hopefully be able to afford a replacement tablet pen soon. In the meantime, you might like to check out my 3DS-drawn run, Still Unnamed!
TheNuzlockeDuo Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
:bulletpurple: Ahhh, I will check Still Unnamed out once I get settled in at home later - after classes & work of course haha.

The first panel looks great imo, no worries on that one. Glad you agree on the battle though - it was very lively and fun to read because you drew it so well! :D
TheScribbler12 Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Student General Artist
What can I stare at to make my Mudkips look better lol
tincyber Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Zephyr-azure Featured By Owner May 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Man, Merp keeps getting more badass as the story progresses! That Skarmony scared the crap outta me, though... you did a good job with it XD

Since you're asking for critique, I do have one thing to say... the way the text is arranged is kinda confusing. I mean, it was extreme helpful that you color coded it, but in some occasions, like when you have bubbles next to each other horizontally (especially in the third to last panel), the order doesn't make a lot of sense (probably just because there's a lot of side conversations, so I'm not sure who's talking to whom at first).

Other than that, though, this page was beautiful :'D So action-packed!
ZuesKillerProduction Featured By Owner May 2, 2014
Oh goodie, a pokemon that evolves into a flying mobile-attack-station of the acopolypse. Lets hope you brought ice ty-oh yeah....when the time comes...try not to die.

Because Rt. 202 wasn't annoying enough, with the drunk Ralts here and there.
Johnny-Snow Featured By Owner May 2, 2014
2 of the skarmory's chicks starved that night.  It was a bad night...
ccucco Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WHOA that page was action-packed man. 
SakuraNights Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I LOVE this page!! I know what I said before, but THIS. This has to be my favorite page yet!!

And don't be a jerk, Merp, Breads really was helping... ;A;
Sir-Herp Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Student General Artist
Muahaha! That means I'm doing something right. xD

Ahh, Merp really did appreciate that Breadstick distracted the Skarmory, but he was just pretty upset about seeing the bullying Skarmory and the fact that Herp literally sat down and watched. 8D

Anyways, how's this page? Is it too detailed or hard to read/follow? (I'm really worried about that, ahhh...) Anything I should change, or improve on next time?
SakuraNights Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
True, true... I love their expressions, and poses, and.. GAH! Just so awesome! And I loooove Breadstick!! X3

Not in my opinion, no! This is great! Aahh.. I guess maybe the panel where Merp catches Swablu? I almost missed it the first time reading, thought he was throwing the ball at Skarmory. Maybe a small filler panel with the ball hitting Swablu would help transition that, idk.. ^^;

Also, love Swablu in panel 9 (the 3-way split panel) :D
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